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What was specifically revised from one draft to another?
- The biggest change from one draft to another was from my first draft to my second. I completely threw out the introduction and conclusion of my first draft and added completely new ones for my second. I felt that my new intro and conclusion were huge improvements. I also added lots of evidence.
Point to global changes: how you did you reconsider your thesis or organization?
- I completely changed my thesis because in the beginning I did not understand the purpose of the essay. I thought we were arguing a side of the topic. Once I realized we were analyzing rhetorical choices I changed my thesis completely.
What lead you to these changes?
- See above.. Mostly a change in the audience.
How do these changes affect your creditability as an author?
- These changes made me more creditable because it made it so I was responding to the right prompt and writing for the correct audience. If I were to write on the wrong thing that would not look very good to my peers.
How will these changes better address the audience or venue?
- These changes better address the audience because I am now writing for the correct audience. If I had stayed with my previous thesis then the correct audience would have had no idea what I was talking about and they would not learn to analyze rhetorical devices like they are supposed to.
- I did not really reconsider sentence structure and style. I added sentences of longer length when I redid my introduction. I have variety in my sentences with some being long, some short, and some at middle length. I some sentences I was able to eliminate wordiness.
How will these changes assist your audience in understanding your purpose?
- The changes to sentence length helps my audience understand my purpose because I switch sentence length and its always is nice for readers to not feel like they are reading the same thing over and over. By eliminating wordiness I was able to make the point of my sentences clear which assist the reader because they understand quicker.
Did you have to reconsider the conventions of the particular genre in which you are writing?
- I have written essays before so I was pretty used to the genre. I did reconsider the conventions of my conclusions however, writing it in a way that answers the "so what".
How does the process of reflection help you reconsider your identity as a writer?
- When reflecting on this paper I realized that I was comfortable removing a whole paragraph from my writing and completely starting over. I have never wanted to do that and this time I did and it took me out of my comfort zone as a writer. I was able to completely redo both my introduction and conclusion, and I now realize I am comfortable and able to do this.
Reflection
I read the reflections of Addie and Lauren and we all agreed on certain things. We all agreed that we did not understand who we were writing for at the beginning. This made the project very confusing until we figured it out. We all agreed that the class discussion where we discussed who the audience should be was very useful and was a turning point for the project.
Like you, I found that re-writing my introduction made it much more focused and interesting than it was in my first draft. I also learned a lot about introductions when we reviewed them in class and discussed effective ways to write an introduction for a rhetorical analysis. However, unlike you I have never written a rhetorical analysis before. I have written analytical essays where I create my own argument in consideration to the meaning of the text, but I have never written about the strategies used by an author in order to influence their audience. I thought it was interesting learning about rhetorical strategies and their uses because I have used them before in my own writing unknowingly.
ReplyDeleteI can really agree with you on the fact that your introduction and conclusion were greatly changed between the different versions of your draft. I feel like severely changing these paragraphs greatly improved my work as a whole. I also can really relate you you on the fact that you made a great effort to eliminate wordiness in your writing. This is always a concern for me! Finally, I really liked how you said this project revealed/ forced you to be willing to completely throw at full paragraphs of your writing. Totally getting rid of my intro and conclusion was tough at first, but was really effective in the long run. Thus, I now see that throwing out paragraphs, though tough at first, can be really beneficial.
ReplyDeleteI can really relate to how you had to rewrite your introduction and conclusion to keep the certain audience in mind. When I first wrote mine, I didn't have an audience in mind that were trying to learn how to deconstruct a rhetorical analysis causing me to have to do some major revisions. This project also took me out of my comfort zone because I never really had to throw out entire portions of my writing and start over.
ReplyDeleteI was the same in that from my first draft to second, I basically wrote two completely different intros and conclusions. Overall I felt that this was necessary for my essay to be successful just as you did! I also can relate to how you edited your sentences to make them less wordy. I had to do the same thing and even change structure around a bit as well. You also helped bring to my attention that before this Project, I had never deleted an entire paragraph and rewritten it. It's definitely scary but now we know it can really be beneficial!
ReplyDeleteI agree that this paper really helped me grow as a writer. Much as you grew more comfortable with making bold changes and edits, so too did I. I think these skills, in both our cases, will prove very helpful in building effective composition skills which transcend this single class.
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